TS:  Topic Sentence  (Opinon)

F:     Fact                                For Example, “…..”

O:     Opinion                         This shows that

O                                             This also shows that

F                                             In addition

O

O

F                                             Moreover,

O

O

CS-   Closing Sentence: Restates

TS:  _______________ is the best___________.

Tacos are the best food.  For example, there are many combinations of tacos.  TST people can make them to their specific tastes.  TAST that anyone can find a type of taco he or she likes.  In addition, tacos are covered with different toppings.  TST, once again, they are versatile.  TAST each taco eater can design tacos the way they like.  Moreover, tacos can be eaten on the go.  TST they are convenient. TAST that they are perfect for snacking on.  Tacos rule!

M.A.C. brand is the best makeup.  For example, it is made from high quality ingredients. TST it is better for your skin.  TAST users will have less breakouts, since make up usually poisons the skin.  In addition, it is very expensive and therefore, exclusive.  TST it is carefully crafted. TAST those in the industry prefer it.  Moreover, MAC doesn’t test on animals.  TST those who care about animals and being fair to our furry friends support MAC.  TAST the brand is socially aware.  Since MAC is a bastion of social change, expensive, and made from high quality ingredients, it is the best make-up.

1.              Remove and vary transitions.

2.              Combine and lengthen sentences.

3.              Add extra fact/opinions.

4.              Mix the sentence types.

5.              Re order the sentences.

6.              Find better words.

Next class- Building Alchemist essay, checking paragraphs, 6 traits grading “Mother Nature”

HW-  Finish reading/ complete paragraph from class.